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GWENFREWI

Still torn up
Tuesday, December 27, 2005

After watching Serenity for the 3rd time, this little scene came across as a private discussion between Mal and Zoe rather than about the ship.


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Title: Still torn up Author: Gwenfrewi Rating: G Fandom: Firefly Spoilers: HUGE for end of the BDM Summary: Just my little take on some lines said in the movie. Mal & Zoe Length: 152 Disclaimer: The great, almighty and powerful Joss Whedon, Mutant Enemy, etc. own the universe and characters. I'm just playing with them. Author's Note: After watching Serenity for the 3rd time, this little scene came across as a private discussion between Mal and Zoe rather than about the ship. Feedback: Relished at pflynn@ev1.net Copyright (c) December 2005 Patricia Flynn

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“Sir, we have a green light. Inspection’s pos, and we’re clear for up thrust.”

Mal assimilated this information as he strode up to Zoe.

Staring her straight in the eye he asked, “Think she’ll hold together?”

With his eyes, Mal let Zoe know he wasn’t talking about Serenity. He needed to know how she was doing and didn’t want to get all touchy, feely on her. He’d heard from Jayne about her actions back in Mr. Universe’s complex and knew she’d had a death wish at that point.

Zoe stared back for a few minutes and then answered.

“She’s tore up plenty, but she’ll fly true.”

Relieved at her response, he went back to business.

“Make sure everything’s secure. Could be bumpy.” He said as he walked out of the cargo bay.

“Always is.” She replied to his departing back.

'Ain’t that the truth', Mal thought as he headed to the bridge.

COMMENTS

Tuesday, December 27, 2005 7:48 PM

GWENFREWI


Thanks. It just struck me that it was so easy to take it as a ship discussion at first viewing and by the third it had become this.

Tuesday, December 27, 2005 10:12 PM

LUCASHARPER


I like it, but you might wanna take a look at this line and maybe correct it:

"With his eyes, Mal let him know he wasn’t talking about Serenity."

Luc

Wednesday, December 28, 2005 2:42 PM

BELLONA


Anonymous (24.27.111.143) - aww, you be quiet...i liked it

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Thursday, December 29, 2005 3:44 PM

GWENFREWI


Thanks for the shiny feedback everyone. And I fixed that line, thanks for pointing it out.

To anonymous:
I'm glad that you thought that it was obvious what was being said their but I personally didn't catch it until the 3rd watching of the DVD, so I posted this in the hopes that people who hadn't seen it already would see what I and obviously you had already seen.


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