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PRICEMERC

Tyen Shiao Duh
Saturday, July 15, 2006

I don't like this one as much as the other's. A bit of a narrative, which isn't bad, but doesn't nessesarily fit with this story. It's what poured out. The next one may not be thought but more dialogue. Zoe/Jayne conversation. We'll see how this goes. Not promising a happy ending. Not promising there won't be either.


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It's good to be alive. I'm laying in the infirmary, half asleep, due to Simon's dopin' me. This job we just had, Went a bit further south than the others ever did. We rescued a handful of prisoners from a slaver's keep. That bit wasn't all that difficult. Was the man gave us the job, some idiot, believe he was recommended by that high class fella Mal met at the party on Persephone a long while back.

We brought back 7 people, expecting to get paid and thanked. That Liou coe shway duh biao-tze huh hoe-tze duh bun ur-tze had no plans on cooperating with that.

Come to find out, he was a gorram slaver himself. Man we'd rescued them folks from, had been takin his "property" same way he'd takin his. I believe they were friends of some sort, took the lives of other people, including us, as a game, as some sort of ruttin' joke.

When we let them people go, we was damned surprised to see men ghost in from all over, guns pointin' in our direction.

The events came after that weren't pleasant. When he demanded the girls, placin' a disgustin eye on Zoë, I went off crazy-like, takin down a few guards, and givin' everyone else a chance to escape.

I'd seen men look at women like that before. Only Tyen shiao duh what he had planned for Zoë, and I couldn't take it.

I was taken down, and for what seemed like weeks, I was tortured. I kept my mind on her, and it helped. A bit.

Serenity came back for me, after a while. Mal had been hit, and it'd taken a day or two.

I heard the gunshots from my cell. Zoë was the first through the door. I spoke her name and she shot my gaurd then nodded before speaking mine.

It was amazin', seein her storm inta that dim room, outlined by bright light from the hall. Like what my ma used to describe to me angels looked like. She'll speak now. She's got no choice. *****

I was worried...

Worried about Jayne. The feeling is strange, and I want it to go away. The operation was somewhat familiar. A bit like the rescue of the Captain and Wash. Except I talked my way through to getting Wash back safely. I guess it fits. Wash with conversation and level-headedness, and Jayne with violence and weapons.

River just came by. Told me he was awake, that it was my turn to go to him. It's a bit strange, seeing as she's been on the bridge all day, and hasn't left the pilot's seat. Wash's pilot seat. Weird and River were born on the same day.

I'm going to go. I don't know what I'll say. If I'll say anything. The fact that Jayne was almost killed doesn't change the fact that my husband is gone forever. It's important that he knows that as well as I do.

COMMENTS

Saturday, July 15, 2006 8:04 PM

AGENTRUSCO


Your Zoe/Jayne stuff intrigues me. I have a strong aversion, but you write incredibly well.

Saturday, July 15, 2006 10:14 PM

PHOENIXROSE


I do not have a strong aversion and I really like this. It seems rather bare-bones; I think you could expand even this little piece quite a bit.

Sunday, July 16, 2006 12:10 AM

AMDOBELL


It would have been good if this had been written out as a story so we could live through what happened vicariously rather than as a glimpse at Jayne remembering. I thought Zoe's reaction was spot on. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me

Sunday, July 16, 2006 6:22 AM

PRICEMERC


I do see what you mean about the bare bones bit. Because it was such kind of them telling story of what happened, I didn't want to extend it to the point where it completely changed this particular line of fic.

the next chapter is coming, and it's dialogue, third person, complete change. I think it would be the only way to tell that bit.

Sunday, July 16, 2006 8:14 AM

BLUEEYEDBRIGADIER


Dunno...really kinda like this bare bones style you have here, PriceMerc. Sure...could have been longer, but if ya prefer shorter stuff, then I am not gonna complain;)

BEB

Sunday, July 16, 2006 3:23 PM

PRICEMERC


lol. ok. don't nessesarily like it. i wrote down what fit, and didn't nessesarily think about length so much as trying to get what needed to be said, said.

And plus, sometimes, I tend to see zoe and jayne as the most simple, down to earth people on the show (kaylee's including in that too) so i didn't thinhk it would fit to stuff page after page of zoe/jayne thinking, because it seem right, to me that is


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