BLUE SUN ROOM FAN FICTION - ADVENTURE

HEWHOKICKSALOT

A Mighty Thorn In a Mighty Paw Ch. 8
Sunday, October 8, 2006

A screenplay taking place not long after the events of "Serenity." Some new characters have been introduced (not all of 'em bad guys...)


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INT. NILS HOUSE

Pan around Nils and Mal then track across room through door to next room over. Swing to the left and track toward window. Stop at CU of window. Window fills frame. A large shadow appears.

Jayne and another man equal his size suddenly crash through the window, rolling on the floor in a flurry of punches. Jayne still has his rifle slung across his back.

The other man ends up on top of Jayne, draws back his fist for a huge punch, only to be bucked off by Jayne at the last instant. Jayne rolls backward and springs to one knee, bringing his rifle to bear on the man.

Nils storms into the room, Mal, Zoe, Zig, and Jack close on his heals.

NILS: What in the name o' gui is goin' on?

Jayne doesn't take his eyes off the man.

View down barrel of Jayne's rifle, from muzzle to Jayne's tense face.

JAYNE: Mal, this guy jumped me.

Whip to Nils.

NILS: Mal, he one o' yers?(Mal nods) Jig, is that true? You attack this man without cause?

JIG stands up slowly, his hands in view.

JIG: He was snoopin' around, actin' all wierd. I thought he was plannin' on aidin' in a double-cross.

Nils shakes his head and looks at Mal.

NILS: I've had many a talk with this boy 'bout his thinkin' and how it ain't never been good for my business. (quietly to Zoe) Boy's loyal as a pit bull, but dumber 'n sack o' stones.

MAL: Sounds a mite familiar. Jayne, stow that firearm.

Jayne hesitates to respond, then does as he's ordered. He, too rises to his feet.

JAYNE: I was doin' what you said, Mal. Just watchin' the perimeter, mindin' my own.

Nils slaps Mal on the back, nearly doubling him over.

NILS: (mildly indignant) Mal, you didn't think you couldn't trust me, now did ya?

MAL: With our unsullied history of loyalty and faith? Could ya really blame me for holdin' out?

Nils laughs planting his hand on Mal's shoulder. Mal shudders from the impact, but tries to remain straght-faced.

NILS: Mal, I ain't the man I once was. I found me a cause, a reason to keep on. I had to down-size my crew 'cause of it. (reaches out to shake Jig by the back of neck, some tough-guy affection)Turns out many of my ol' boys were hangin' 'round for less than honorable reasons, the almighty dollar and so forth.

MAL:(just a touch of sarcasm)You don't say. NILS: I'm not driven by coin no more, kid. I know I used to be. Consumed by it, I was. Not no more. (gestures for Mal to follow) Come on.

Nils leads the Mal and his crew back into the main room and up a set of stairs to the second floor. Nils slides back a perfectly camouflaged panel to expose a state-of-the-art security keypad. A loud click is heard. He then allows Mal, Zoe, and Jayne to enter the non-descript door next to the pad.

CU of Mal's awestruck face as he takes in his surroundings.

MAL: Cai bu shi...

ZOE: Amazing...

Jayne is the last one to enter. He looks around, bewildered.

JAYNE: What?

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COMMENTS

Sunday, October 8, 2006 2:03 PM

AMDOBELL


I echo Jayne;s comment - "What?"
- Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me

Sunday, October 8, 2006 2:09 PM

HEWHOKICKSALOT


Can't give away all the secrets right away... (wink)



Rob O.

Sunday, October 8, 2006 2:38 PM

SHINYTRINKET


That's right, string 'em along, keep 'em wantin' more....

I like the similarity between Jayne and Jig. Wait--are they long-lost brothers! Oh crap, hope I didn't spoil anything...

Sunday, October 8, 2006 5:12 PM

HEWHOKICKSALOT


Gorrammit, girl! You've given up the entire story! Now I have to go back to washing dishes at McDonalds and give up this whole writing thing...


"Whataya' think? Pretty cunning, eh?"

Rob O.

Sunday, October 8, 2006 11:11 PM

BORNTOFLY


Damn you and your damnable mystery!

MORE! I demand it!

Tuesday, October 10, 2006 5:29 PM

BLUEEYEDBRIGADIER


Oh...now I really wanna know what Mal and Zoe are shocked at;)

BEB

Wednesday, December 20, 2006 1:26 PM

MAGHAFFAR


Lovin' it all so as far I progress thru... Just wondered about the Chinese Mal says... Not tracking it. "Cai Bu Shi" means "No, actually it isn't" or "Actually, no." so not getting why Mal would say this upon seeing whatever he's seeing cuz there's no dialog set up for it beforehand. Dong ma?

Saturday, February 17, 2007 9:48 PM

JETFLAIR


Huh. :adopts Mal-like puzzled expression:


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