Just a few words, giving a llttle bit back.... by Eliavrezz

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Just a few words, giving a llttle bit back....

POSTED BY: ELIAVREZZ
UPDATED: Wednesday, January 31, 2007 13:13
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Sunday, January 28, 2007 3:58 PM

Hi. Here's a poem that I wrote. I hope it doesn't stink...

It all began with the Earth then that was
With numbers too great for our celestial home
Into the Black we dared to tread
Making our home in the celestial web
Onward in time to the verse we call home
When war has arrived risking loss of our freedom
Oppression and privilege beat us down to the mud
Our coats turn to brown and we press on to bear arms
And for time seemingly endless we fight and we rally
Until that dark day in Serenity Valley
When freedom is taken by the horde filling the sky
Years now have gone by and deep in the black
Rides the crew of free will in Serenity's hold
Their souls to the Alliance never have they sold
They struggle to live and keep to the sky
They struggle indeed on their mere Firefly

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Sunday, January 28, 2007 4:48 PM

YINYANG

You were busy trying to get yourself lit on fire. It happens.

The only thing I'd say that's weird about it is the cadence/rhyme pattern. Otherwise, I like it - especially descriptive phrases like "celestial web" and "Oppression and privilege beat us down to the mud/Our coats turn to brown".

Oh, and welcome to FFF.NET!

Rules: http://www.fireflyfans.net/thread.asp?b=2&t=22892
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Sunday, January 28, 2007 5:02 PM

PENGUIN

King of the Mythical Land that is Iowa

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Sunday, January 28, 2007 7:42 PM

ELIAVREZZ

Thanks for the response and the welcome. My work usually has a rythym to it, though I don't know why...haha
Ya'll can ask me whatever you want to get to know me (goes for anyone of course)...Kinda shy, but then again, not really...not young either (well, not to some anyway)...

I'm a leaf on the wind...

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Sunday, January 28, 2007 8:18 PM

DEBB

Eliavrezz, welcome to the mad house! I liked the poem. So, long time fan or new fan(we love them all)?

Debb

Debb

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Wednesday, January 31, 2007 11:11 AM

ELIAVREZZ

Hi Debb,

I've been a fan for a few years now, though not since the beginning. Was introduced to it by a friend, and fell in love with it, and the characters, from there.

Well gotta go, talk to you later.

Eliavrezz

I'm a leaf on the wind...

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Wednesday, January 31, 2007 1:13 PM

ASORTAFAIRYTALE

Oooh, that's so pretty!! Great job!

I always wish that I could write creative stuff like that, but the only things I can write well are essays and stuff...

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Love keeps her in the air when she outta fall down, tells you she's hurting before she keels. Makes her a home.

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