BLUE SUN ROOM FILK

OLDSOUL1987

rushed moment
Thursday, February 2, 2006

ok i was not going to so but this is totaly in my head a mal/inara t.hing....though i think you might be able ot fit it some other pairing, but probibly not


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Here we are again, never knowing what to say,

the silence is disturbing cause we both have things to say

Please don't look me in the eyes

cause I'm not sure that I can hide

the truth that’s looking for a way

to show that it’s alive

My heart is bursting in my chest

the words are tangled on my lips

They just can't seem to find

an escape and worse

with every second the silence in the air

makes it hard to catch my breath

The closeness of your skin

attracts my finger tips

As we get closer our eyes meet

I see fear painted on your face

reflecting on my own

Instincts make us pull away

with out a touch the moment fades

As does the silence when rushed words leave

our lips, we always leave so much unsaid

This was our last good morning

last good evening....

and our first good bye

COMMENTS

Thursday, February 2, 2006 1:35 PM

OLDSOUL1987


Will some one leave a frig'n comment!bad good anything, flame me if you wish! but come on, i almost never post poetry that i write specially romantic sort! and now that i do i see that about 40 people have read it but no one has commented?! GHA! please some one comment! Was it to dramatic? did it flow ok? i was going to make it a bit less agnsty but that is what mal and inara are. i need feed back!

Thursday, February 2, 2006 8:41 PM

THEALMIGHTYSPAMWARRIOR


u put in effort
and thats good
frankly i cant be stuffed reading it
but im sure its good

Thursday, February 2, 2006 9:08 PM

OLDSOUL1987


I knew i should have put in more agnst, more heart ach like i had it before... oh well. ok now the question is how can i fix it? How should i change it make it more what? change how what line is fraised what ever but if any one can give it to me i would like some more detailed feed back, you know so i can make it better. or should i just make a new one? i could make another one cause my mind is swimming with insperation i just have a habbit of holding back.


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