Tuesday, October 24, 2006

Actual excerpt from a University-level essay that I'm proofreading:


Security focus has changed throughout history and is changing towards a more extensive concept of that concern. Security analysts became willing instrument of their national policy makers for intellectualizing the national opinion of all those altercations of different ideologies or cultures, and in the process, surrendered their dispassionate judgment. Security post cold war and security post 9/11 are those of different in focus although it seems instead of going forward international security is going in cercal. Where should state, individually focus on and what should international regime focus on when it comes to security measure? Many new policies within state and between states are not focusing on only military economic and physical aspect of security; for example security as a social, particularly in US where state declared war on drugs. Second example is the vigilantes who are trying to deal with illegal immigrants they are armed and act as military force to clear out illegal immigrants or send them back to their countries. Human security, security as liberation where government takes security measure against its own citizen, take Sudan for example where the government of Khartoum is helping the militia to destroy Darfurians.

This, BTW, is the FIRST paragraph.

This is gonna be a long one. :(


Thursday, October 26, 2006 1:30 PM


I am personally more concerned by the shit sentence structure (missing words, lack of capitalization, punctuation wonkiness, etc.)...though the topic ain't a page-turner either:(

Still...could be worse I suppose, Cybersnark. Could be completely illegible or something;)


Tuesday, October 24, 2006 2:19 PM


Oh, that's painful. I feel for you, my friend. Best wishes for the rest of the awful mess.

Tuesday, October 24, 2006 11:05 AM


I think the only way you're going to get through this is to drink a shot every time they use the word 'security'. Who knows, it might start to make sense by the third paragraph.


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