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Novelisation: crappy
Sunday, October 16, 2005 10:45 PM
RUNA27
Quote:Originally posted by Ptrope: Two major grammatical errors in this sentence (ironic, considering it comments upon awkward sentence structure):
Quote: Quote:His sentence structure is awkward and pitifully, reminds me of some of the stories in my Grade 12 writing class at the beginning of the year (before we'd learned anything).You should have used "pitiful," an adjective, instead of "pitifully," an adverb.
Quote:His sentence structure is awkward and pitifully, reminds me of some of the stories in my Grade 12 writing class at the beginning of the year (before we'd learned anything).
Quote: Also, the "reminds me" is unrelated to any noun in the preceding clause; it needs a noun or pronoun to define it.
Quote: Misspelling or simply an incorrect choice of contraction:Quote:There's plenty of writers out there who are hysterically funny, and don't insult the intelligence of their readers."Writers" is plural, therefore "there's" is incorrect; it should have been "There are plenty of writers" (and maybe substitute "many" for "plenty of").
Quote:There's plenty of writers out there who are hysterically funny, and don't insult the intelligence of their readers.
Quote: Well, you did say you didn't make any errors ;).
Quote: As for KRAD's novelization, I wasn't especially shot with it, myself, because I thought it was a poor editorial choice to construct the narrative in an autobiographical fashion, speaking in the characters' "voices" and changing from scene to scene as the focal character changes. I found it a conceit, very artificial and off-putting; I would have much preferred the narrative be simply that, because it doesn't really do a good job of getting into the characters' heads, the only really valid reason to take such an approach. I bought the book, but I gave up reading it after the first chapter, because of this; if he had chosen one character to relate the entire story, such as Inara or Kaylee, or possibly even River, I think it would have been a much stronger story.
Quote:I rather enjoyed the novelization, but I did have a few problems with it. Primarily that it read much like the screenplay with a few extra lines thrown in.
Quote:It's clear that KRAD is a fan of Firefly, though - which is the only reason I picked it up in the first place.
Quote: Movie novelizations are tricky, because you cannot include much more action outside of what the screenplay contains, unless you fill "gaps" in time (and there are not very many gaps in Serenity to fill). Otherwise, the book would be much shorter.
Quote: (Oh, it might be noted that KRAD writes a LOT of science fiction. I'd say the fact that he continues to get published says something about his writing).
Quote: Speaking of writing, it is hard to take criticism of an established author seriously when the criticism has several spelling and grammatical mistakes.
Quote: The real 1st rule of writing is proofread :).
Quote: Normally I would have ignored them, as I see far, far worse every day... but when complaining about someone else's writing, they stand out.
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